>Juan was walking in the Retiro park
Juan walked in the Retiro park

>But not at the instant
But not in an instant
But not instantly

>because a human brain
because human brain

>about one minute and half or even three minutes, which was a case of Juan
this is bad, it is not clear what you wanted to say

>it was the cause it took
it was the reason it took

>lying in the ground with his broken neck and Juand even couldn´t shout
lying on the ground with his neck broken so Juand couldn´t even shout

>no one could know he needed help
no one could understand he needed help

>no one could know he needed help, because it was very late and there were a very few people in the Retiro.

Structure of this sentence is bad regardless of the language.

no one could understand he needed help. In addition to that, it was very late and there were very few people in Retiro.

>Then he was dying completely alone, poor, poor Juan.
Poor Juan, he was dying completely alone.

>Last minutes of his life he was thinking about a worldwide revolution, because it was making him a little more happy…
In(during) the(his) last minutes he was thinking about the world revolution, because it made him a little bit happier.

>who wanted avoid massacre
who wanted to avoid massacre

>wich would happened without doubts if Juan lived.
which (fuck the spell checker!) would definitely happen if Juan lived.

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>So he was there, lying in the ground with his broken neck and Juand even couldn´t shout, he was paralyzed and no one could know he needed help, because it was very late and there were a very few people in the Retiro.

Very long sentence with bad structure and broken logic.

So he was there, lying on the ground with his neck broken so he couldn´t even shout. In addition to that, it was very late so there were very few people in Retiro. Juan was paralyzed and could not get any help.

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Спасибо, анон. Но это сизифов труд, я всё равно мои ошибки не запоминаю и всегда их повторяю. Но ничего, рано или поздно оно станет лучше.

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>мои ошибки
свои ошибки

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>>Juan was walking in the Retiro park
>Juan walked in the Retiro park

was walking

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Juan took a walk down the Retiro park

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